Jimmer Fredette is one of my favorite basketball players who plays in the NBA. Although he is struggling in the league now, I always watch his play after the game. When I find that Jimmer didn't played the game, I become disappointed and go to the another page instead of watching the recap.
First time I knew Jimmer Fredette is during the March Madness in 2011. (March Madness refers to NCAA men's basketball tournament. Because 64 colleges in U.S participate, its very large in size and lots of people cheer for college they like.) I think he was at his peak at that time. He was spotlighted for his amazing scoring skills, especially in 3-point shooting.
This is a highlights of Jimmer Fredette in his senior year. He averaged 28.9 points/ game at that season and scored career high 52 points. Thanks to his scoring ability, BYU cruised up to elite eight, which is only three games away from winning the national championship. Due to his outstanding performance in his final year in college, he was drafted 10th picks in the NBA.
Lots of people and NBA players were excited about Jimmer Fredette finally playing in the NBA. However, when the season started, Jimmer had difficulties playing game. Everybody was surprised, and Jimmer was out of people's attention. Some analyst even said that Jimmer will not be able to play in the NBA anymore. He'll have to move to the other league in order to continue his basketball career.
Although people don't really pay attention on Jimmer anymore, I continued to watch his game. Sadly, he didn't have a huge impact in his rookie season.
However, his second season (2012-2013 season) seems to be different than his previous one. At the beginning, he seemed to be struggling in the league. But recently, I found out that Jimmer Fredette seems to be getting used to the league.
Analyst from Sacramento Kings said that
"Although Jimmer is a good shooter, he needs to improve in his defense, and get used to his new role in the team. If he plays more aggressively, it will help him a lot. With his talents, I can find no reason why Jimmer Fredette will have no chance in playing in the NBA anymore. Like he did in BYU, I believe that he will improve in a few years."
It seems like Jimmer Fredette have improved a lot in the summer league. He scored a game high two weeks ago and made into plenty of game highlights. I'm happy that Jimmer seems to be improving and is getting used to the game in NBA. It's quite surprising to me that I could be a fan of somebody, regardless of his performance.
Last but not least, I believe that people who truly like or love constantly is a people who pays attention to those things (or people) regardless of people's thoughts on it.
It's been almost a year since I've came into KMLA. When I try to think what I've done so far in this school, I feel that I'm lucky to be in this school. If I went to ordinary school instead of KMLA. I'm pretty sure that I would have ended up studying and preparing for 수능, and I still think it will be terrible if I spend three years just for a single test. Sometimes, I think that I would have lived a busier life if I went to ordinary school. I can feel that I am wasting a lot more time than the past. However, I believe that KMLA provided better stuffs than living a busy life. Although I became a bit lazy after I entered the school, I was able to learn how to use time EFFICIENTLY. Plus, friends here in KMLA are unique. All of them are outstanding and talented, which allows me to study harder. Also, course in KMLA is differs from 일반고, or in other words, course in KMLA is faster than 일반고. It allowed me to learn many things in such a short time. I think that amount of knowledge I gained in KMLA for a year is equal to amount of knowledge that other students gain in 일반고 for two or three years. What I love about my school is that they have an indoor gym. Most high schools in Korea don't have indoor gym, which means that it will be hard to play sports when it's too cold or hot. Thanks to the indoor gym, I can play sports whenever I want to. Although school life may seem too tough, I believe that coming into KMLA is never a wrong decision.
A creature that seems to be bunny doll making another one and disappearing is a simple summary of the video. Before I start the essay, I would like to notice that I'll be calling this "unknown creature" from the video a bunny. Right after I finished watching, there was a thing that came up to my mind. I felt that this video can be related to our lives. Specifically, I had a feeling that the video had shown me life as a whole.
At the very beginning, a bunny is holding a book, standing still and blinking its eyes. It could be portrayed as a baby or a child who has no idea why they were born and what they are supposed to do. Then the bunny goes to the table, and reads the book. It was similar to the youths learning about something in order to use the knowledge when they become an adult. Also, it could mean the youths who set a goal for their lives. After the bunny read a book, it started to work in order to create the other bunny. When the bunny finished its work, a doll he made didn't move. In my view, it seemed similar to failure in one's life. Eventually, a doll started moving and the original bunny was happy about it. Right after the two rabbits faced each other, the original one gave a book to the new one and disappeared. Now, the new bunny reacted almost the same as the original bunny at the beginning of the video.
It felt awkward at the last part of the video. I was able to feel sadness, anger, and happiness at once. I felt happiness because it showed that people may achieve their ultimate goal of their lives and feel the sense of accomplishment. However, I was able to feel sadness and anger at the same time because it seemed like the video was suggesting that all you get is happiness after all the hard work and preparation through a whole life. After the work is done, people usually leave inheritance for next generation. This is what I thought when a bunny passed a book and disappeared.
At first, the video made me think about my life deeply. I questioned myself. "Why do I have to live hard and achieve something if I'm going to die anyway?" I still couldn't find the answer of it. What people say is that we should work hard when we are alive for the NEXT GENERATION. However, the problem is that I couldn't find other good reasons for it. I believe that I'll have to deal with this question for a long time.
First thing that comes into my mind after I read the article is that it's quite hard to understand it. It's interesting that people in tribe called "Nacirema" tried to cure their body using magic. However, medicine person tries to keep information about the magic, which allowed myself to know that the magic was fake. Then why did people in Nacirema tried to cure other people using magic when there is no effects? According to the article, it functioned as one of the ritual activities, based on people's belief on magic. Then, next question about this article is about the purpose of this article.
When we read the article at first, there is no way that we can find the purpose of this article. All this medicine men, ceremonies, temple called latipso, holy-mouth-man, and etc.; it may sound quite ridiculous. But once I found out that these ridiculous thing has so many similarities with the society now, it becomes serious. However, in order to think critically about this article, we should first notice a thing. As some might have noticed, Nacirema is a back-spelled letter of American. Once we get up to this idea, it gets much easier to understand the article. When we write temple called latipso backward, it is ospital, which indicates hospital today. Things done in the temple is not exactly the thing that people or doctors do today, but it's nothing more than a hospital that is described as a ceremony. Including holy-mouth-man and other many ceremonial activities, it all indicates things people do these days to keep their body clean and people who keeps other's body clean.
However, it seems that the writer of this article is making fun of people and medical technology these days. According to the article, writer stated that people still believe in magic although the magic sometime causes a negative results. Although some people might argue that the article is one sided, I don't think that there's a problem about writer's one sided opinion. If the article is being sarcastic about every incidence, I'll also say that it's wrong. It is true that lots of disease are gone and people are living longer than the past due to scientific development and change of people's habit of keeping themselves clean. However, I believe that the article is being sarcastic about several incidence that are excessive and un-needed. As one of many people who believe that medical technology today and people's habit of keeping them clean has more benefits than without it, I think that this article is written to make people think critically.
1) Chosen Essay : The essay that our group chose for this workshop is Jiho Kim’s Essay
2) Why we chose this essay : The idea about changes in transportation in the near future was creative.
권하람-basketball 인혜민-disabled people 장석우-technology
3) Merits&Shortcomings
①Merits
Inspiring ideas about changes in transportation
Organized well
Clear body paragraphs
②<!--[endif]-->Shortcomings
Some of the sentences too wordy
Little or no example of each idea
Minor grammatical mistakes
4) Revision
In order to fill up the weak spot of the essay, each of us came up with some examples to support the ideas. Since the essay is about the expectation of future technology, most of them are corresponding examples from the past or present.
Also, we tried to revise the essay according to concision. This was done by erasing some unnecessary parts or changing sentences into more concise ones.
5) Original version
As time goes by, world is changing faster and more drastically than before. As technology develops, and as the world gets more complicated than before, changes are so fast that it’s next to impossible for people to catch up the changes. Among these changes, transportation will change drastically to be faster, more comfortable, easier, and more environmentally friendly.
First of all, transportation of 21 century will be much faster and more comfortable than the past. As the word globali implies, it is impossible for people to live without the contact with foreigners and their cultures. Confronting such differences is much important for young people who will live in a world that is more complicated and which requires broader sight with vision and creativity. Such need will make the transportation to develop so that it can transport people faster and more comfortable since it will become a norm unlike before where only few needed to move such long distances..
Not only this, but it will be much easier for people to move around than now. Even though transportation system has developed a lot compared to the past, the process that we are required when going from one country to another is so complicated and hard for those who are trying it for the first time. 21stcentury being the century of speed and simplicity, such processes will also get much simple so that people don’t have to worry about it even if it’s their first time. It might be hard to become true for another decade or so, but it seems possible that roads and rails would be constructed between countries so that moving between countries would be just like moving from one village to another in their home country.
Finally, more transportation will use environmentally friendly substances as their fuels instead of fossil fuel. The main reason why such change can be predicted is because the world is running out of usable fossil fuel. Humans used too much of it for past century, and it’s time for use to change different way that will allow us to keep the transportations moving. The second reason for this change is because more people are getting aware of the seriousness our environment is facing. Too much use of fossil fuel and exploitation of nature made the environment to get barren and dirty. Knowing that environment is one of the most important thing to us, it is a social trend to think more about the environment before trying anything. Such trend will also have a significant impact to change in the fuel used to run transportations, making technicians to invent cars and airplanes that can go by solar power or hydrogen.
To sum up, transportation will take more parts of people’s life as time goes by. More people will feel the need for better transportation than before, meaning that there will be drastic changes in transportations. Predictions mentioned above might not become a reality, but it’s certain that transportations will change a lot in one way or another.
6) Revised version
As time goes by, world is changing faster and more drastically than before. As technology develops and as the world gets more complicated than before, changes are made so fast that it’s next to impossible for people to catch up the changes. Among these changes, the change intransportation system will be drastic, changing transportations to be faster, more comfortable, easier, and more environmentally friendly.
First of all, transportation in the 21st century will be faster and more comfortable than the past. Let’s take an example of the development of the ship. First starting out as a small raft, it developed into sailing ship, steamship, merchant ship, and even cruise ship while trying to fulfill the need of people.Especially, it is impossible for people to live without interacting with foreigners and their cultures since the world we are living in is “globalized world”.(Changed the structure of the sentence) Confronting such differences is very important for young people who will live in a world that is more complicated and which requires broader sight with vision and creativity. Such need will make the transportation to develop so that it can transport people faster and more comfortablysince it will become a norm unlike before where only few needed to move such long distances
Not only this, but it will be much easier for people to move around in the future. Even thoughthe transportation system has developed a lot compared to the past, the current immigration policy(concision-too wordy) is so complicated and hard for those who are trying it for the first time. 21st century being the century of speed and simplicity, such processes will also get much simpler so that people don’t have to worry about it even if it’s their first time. Such drastic change will need another decade or so to actually happen(concision), but it seems possible that roads and rails would be constructed between countries so that moving between countries would be just like moving from one village to another in their home country. Existing tunnels like Mont Blanc Tunnelhas been thought as impossible until they were actually built. Just like it was a innovation in transportation, numerous tunnels, rails, and roads will be built in the future as a way to innovate the transportation system.
Current Mont Blanc Tunnel, which is finished building
Finally, more transportation will use environmentally friendly substances as their fuel instead of fossil fuel. This is easily predictable just by the fact that usable fossil fuel is running out.(concision) Humans used too much of it for past century, and it’s time for us to change different way that will allow us to keep the transportation moving. Another reason for this change to be predictable is that(changed structure in order to fit the rest of the revised sentences) more people are getting aware of the seriousness our environment is facing. Too much use of fossil fuel and exploitation of nature made the environment to get barren and dirty. Knowing that environment is one of the most important things to us, it is a social trend to think more about the environment before trying anything. Such trend will also have a significant impact to change in the fuel used to run transportation, making technicians to invent cars and airplanes that can go by solar power or hydrogen.
To sum up, transportation will take more parts of people’s life as time goes by. More people will feel the need for better transportation than before, bringing(concision) drastic changes in transportation. Predictions mentioned above might not become a reality, but it’s certain that transportation will change a lot in one way or another.
I'd like to write about my goal for THIS SEMESTER again. Sometimes, thing you have planned can change when it's needed. I think it's time for me to change my goal and plan for this semester. I tried to stay calm and keep patience about my scores from the mid-term, but after I've checked all the score, I think it would be better for me to get stress from the score right now.
I planned to study without getting any stress at the beginning of the semester. However, I realized that it was wrong. There is nothing you can do without getting a stress. Even playing sports or game can become a cause of a stress. I did not think about that, and whenever I was tired of studying, I would just go up to my bed and sleep or play game. With this kind of behavior, I will never make any positive change this semester. Lesson I learned from the mid-term is that when you really want to achieve something, getting a stress is inevitable.
Plus, I got some stress for a foolish reason. I've got a stress because I've been studying for a good grade this semester. Receiving a good grade requires a perfection. Since I'm not, and never was a perfectionist, trying to study perfectly gave me a lots of stress. Because it was stressful, I gave up too early. I think there is no problem with getting a stress, but getting a stress that I can avoid will be very harmful to me.
Right now at this point, I need a stress. I've barely lived with stress until now. However, in order to make a change, I need a strong stimulants. From now on, until the end of the semester, my goal is to forget about my score from the mid-term and not study for the grade. Plus, I will try not to avoid from getting a stress because without stress, I will be just sitting on the chair playing computer games.
